Cold and shivering, the young woman lay naked on the worn tatami mat.
Flavia Knightsbridge — It’s a little passive, but I like the detail of the tatami mat. It might hint at an exotic setting that would make your book stand out from the suspense pack.
Hilary Ross — There could be lots of reasons for her condition (including being a prisoner in Japan!). I’ve seen similar first sentences, so this one isn’t that original.
Leslie Kazanjian — A vivid, evocative and atmospheric opening line that urges you to read on.
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